Disgruntled-flash fiction

This is an old piece of flash fiction, based on a twist on a prompt where the idea was to tell a story from the 2nd person POV…


Bet you never stopped to consider the consequences, did you? Clicking down the hall in sky-high stilettos, got everyone convinced you’re the cat’s meow. Tall and slender, gorgeous in every way. You smile for them, you have time for them. They always get your best.

“Oh, Daniel, I’m sorry I didn’t text you back. Had a late night. Must have slipped my mind.”

Of course.

Your eyes shifting with discomfort, finally looking away to grasp at invisible excuses. “Daniel! I’m sorry, but…I’m not free tonight. Or…any other night.”

You didn’t consider the consequences.

You didn’t think of me.

But you will.

D.Forde May 2013


About Dyane

Dyane Forde’s love of writing began with an early interest in reading and of words in general. Writing has been a life-long passion and she writes all types of things, from short stories, novels, flash fiction and poetry. Dyane writes to communicate, meaning that writing becomes a means through which she seeks to connect with people on a level deeper than intellect.
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12 Responses to Disgruntled-flash fiction

  1. Oooh … Very disgruntled. Good work succinct and hits the mark 🙂


  2. rcprice says:

    A very sinister ending. I like that.


  3. Oooooh! Scary threat. I want to read what’s next. Writing in 2nd person is the hardest for me. You did a great job.


  4. glenperk says:

    Excellent. You know I love open endings.



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  6. Rat says:

    quite an interesting idea Dyane.. loved it 🙂


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